First Love – Friday Fictioneers

Copyright ā€“ Georgia Koch

Copyright ā€“ Georgia Koch

“Take my hand,” Luke said softy to Maria as he gently led her onto the boat. With the stars and moonlit sky above them, they rowed away from the shore. Silence surrounded them as Luke pulled a ring from his pocket, knelt down before Maria and proposed.

“Yes! Of course I will!”

Sixteen years later, while staring at the abandoned boat, memories from that fateful night flooded Luke’s mind. The storm had come out of nowhere. He had held onto Maria with all his might, but the wind-raged waves proved too strong for him. In a blink, she was gone.


This is a part of Friday Fictioneers, hosted by Rochelle Wisoff-Fields.

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24 Responses to First Love – Friday Fictioneers

  1. And the ring with her! Oh my!

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  2. AnnIsikArts says:

    A lament and fitting to the prompt. Boats, the sea, lost loves, lost lives. It’s a huge tradition/genre including musically, where the lament is universal. In Breton ‘gwerz’, German ‘klagelied’, Italian ‘lamentare’ … šŸ™‚

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  3. Oh…such sorrow. So well done. Sadness is best when it’s only fiction.

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  4. dmmacilroy says:

    Dear Whoamyou,

    And there went the ring, too. Lost legacy. Good story.

    Aloha,

    Doug

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  5. Dear Mewhoami,

    That might just be the shortest engagement in history. Sad.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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  6. Glynis Jolly says:

    This would make the beginnings of a good paranormal story. I like the clean break you do for ‘then’ and ‘now’.

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  7. stormy1812 says:

    Well done! I instantly thought of a song called “The Lighthouse’s Tale” by Nickel Creek (not to be confused with Nickelback lol). Fabulous but incredibly sad lil’ tune…I recommend checking into it. šŸ™‚ The heartache of loss is incredible. You capture that so well.

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  8. Poor Maria. She is certainly copping a hard time in this flash prompt. Your flash was great. So much joy and then bang gone. You could feel the desperation as he tried to save her.

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  9. Margaret says:

    So sudden. What a sad ending to his romantic proposal. Nicely told.

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  10. Nan Falkner says:

    Wow, what a story! It seemed a lot longer and it is so sad. Wow! I’m impressed! Nan

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